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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people believe today that everyone has a right to access to the internet and that governments should provide this access for free. Other people believe that access to the internet is not a right and should be paid for like other services. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

On
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 of the widely discussed issues nowadays is accessibility to the internet for free of charge. Some individuals consider that
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government
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the government
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 should do
this
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and
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 others propose that
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government
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the government
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 should not. It is undeniable that in cutting-edge
technology
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technology,
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people
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's usage of gadgets has become an essential part of our
life
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.
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, in
this
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essay
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i
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 will outline two various perspectives and in the
ending
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 conclude with
personal
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a personal
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 statement. A commonly held belief is that
government
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 must provide stuff in order to
making
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make
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people
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's
life
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lives
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 comfortable. As evidence of
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 is they point that in some regions and countries
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, government
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government
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governments
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 make
easier
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it easier
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 to pay for
such
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 things as
people
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 with disabilities have
discount
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discounts
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 for food, free
apartment
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apartments
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 with wifi and
rest
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the rest
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 of them. It could be explained by the fact that Singapore is the happiest country
among
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in
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 Asia
countries
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apply
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due to
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social
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the social
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 support systems
,
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apply
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 which
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government
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the government
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provided
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provides
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them
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.
As a
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result
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result,
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 it leads to delighted residents to
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a delighted
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government
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.
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, others claim that
internet
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the internet
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 is the same as other facilities and individuals have to make a payment for it. They may mention that things like
utilizing
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 water, electricity and even
for
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apply
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heating
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people
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apply
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have been
paying
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paid
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 for
these
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apply
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from
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 a long time
ago
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. My life with
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my parents
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. I see and
i
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be
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to
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the
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a
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alike
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 situation where my parents in; they each month pay for water
electricity
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and
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 heating as
rest
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the rest
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 of the world. In conclusion,taking into
everything
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account everything
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 mentioned into
account i
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I
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 would declare that the value of tools, usually usage and just materialistic things become solely when
person
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a person
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work
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 for it with labour.
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, the payment makes a value, which is necessary for
be
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 aware of
limit
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the limit
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 and
endeavoring
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endeavouring
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 to preserve
stuff
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things
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 like water
electricity
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, electricity
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,
even
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and even
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 the internet, because if
human
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humans
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will
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do
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 not do that, we may
remain
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be left
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 with nothing, which
is
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apply
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leads to
the
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a
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 catastrophe in the global world.

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planning
Plan your essay before you write. Write a short plan with your view, two sides, and a conclusion.
thesis
State a clear view in the first paragraph and keep it in mind while you write the rest of the essay.
structure
Make each paragraph focus on one main idea and begin with a clear topic sentence.
content
Use simple, real examples that fit the point you are making. Do not use weak or unclear examples.
language
Choose simple words and short sentences to keep your grammar and spelling under control.
accuracy
Check grammar, spelling, and punctuation before you finish.
content
There is an attempt to discuss both sides and to give a personal view.
presentation
Introduction and conclusion are present, even if not strong.
task
Overall topic is relevant to the task.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • right to access
  • essential resources
  • digital economy
  • social equity
  • government responsibility
  • privately funded infrastructure
  • market dynamics
  • personal responsibility
  • fundamental right
  • user fees
  • innovation
  • economic growth
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