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The diagram below shows how a solar box oven cooks food. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a solar box oven cooks food. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of cooking
meal
Correct article usage
a meal
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 through solar power by making a solar
box
Use synonyms
.
Overall
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, the process includes 6 stages, starting from creating
Use synonyms
box
Correct article usage
a box
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 by ending well-prepared food First cardboard is painted black, making sure every spot is wholly painted.
Following
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this
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, a number of different ingredients are put
on
Change preposition
in
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 the pot. After preparing
pot
Correct article usage
the pot
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,
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then
Rephrase
apply
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it comes to getting ready
Use synonyms
box
Correct article usage
the box
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 by putting something
such
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 as grass, newspaper or sawdust. After putting
layout
Correct article usage
the layout
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, there should be
foil
Correct article usage
a foil
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 which should be large enough, in order to cover that black
box
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
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, a glass lid should be
places
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placed
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 on foil. Having done all stages,
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last
Correct article usage
the last
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 step is
that
Correct determiner usage
apply
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to put
under
Correct pronoun usage
it under
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 the sun. The black
color
Change the spelling
colour
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 absorbs the light, making easy meal
cooking
Check wording
apply
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in
natural
Correct article usage
a natural
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words box with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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