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Band 2.5

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsons where relevant.

The site layout illustrates the changes
of
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in
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 a
farm
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 between 1950 and today.
Overall
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, it is noticed that the current
farm
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 layout
added
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has added
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 environmentally friendly
equipments
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equipment
 and commercial facilities for holiday
comparing
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compared
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with
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to
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 the past. On the
1950's
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1950s
 site layout,
it is clear that
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 the
farm
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 land was surrounded by the river and the wider
road
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. The biggest part of the farmland was for sheep, which was separated by the track. Below the track, there were various areas, including fruit trees
area
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, soft fruits
area
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, vegetables
area
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, and
the
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a
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 second large
area
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 to be built for barn,
framhouse
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farmhouse
 and
cultivateing
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cultivating
 chickens. Currently, the new site is still surrounded by the wider
road
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 and the river. On the top of
map
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the map
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, there are four solar panels
on
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in
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 the right corner.
there
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There
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 is a small parking
area
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 below these panels.
Besides
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this
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area
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, there is a large camping
freid
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field
 growing trees, which
is
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apply
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also
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constructed
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has
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 a large parking
area
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comparing
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compared
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with
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to
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that
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the
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 one just mentioned. Between the river and
interal
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internal
road
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, there are more houses to be added,
such
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 as a
farm
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 shop and holiday cottages, which are
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besides
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beside
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 the
interal
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internal
road
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.
Besides
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, the previous barn
area
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changes
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has changed
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 smaller, which is moved between
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the vegetables
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vegetables
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vegetable
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area
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 and
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the chickens
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chickens
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chicken
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 storage.

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structure
Plan your report. Start with one line of aim, then compare 1950 and today in clear parts.
coherence
Use slow link words to show it is about change and compare. E.g. also, but, while, then.
content
Make sure what you say is true to the map. Do not add things not in the plan.
grammar
Check spelling and form for key words like farm, house, barn, trees, solar panels.
style
Use short, clear sentence. Do not mix many ideas in one long line.
content
There is a real effort to compare the two times.
detail
Some good details like 'solar panels' and 'parking area' are used.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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