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Band 4.5

You recently ordered something online. When the delivery came it was not complete. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - Explain what you ordered and what was missing from your delivery - Explain the importance of this delivery - Ask for a replacement item to be sent

Hello Manager, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that
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 I have placed an
order
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of
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for
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shoes
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 on your website - www.walmart.ca
and
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 the
order
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 number was 0001. I ordered the
shoes
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 from your online store for
Halloween
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 sale. The size of
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shoes
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the shoes
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 I got
7UK
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was 7UK
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and
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 actually, I ordered 9UK.
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, I
also
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 ordered the cleaning kit with
shoes
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 that
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 were
also
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 missing. I especially bought those
shoes
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 for my friend's birthday party. I have planned
the
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 theme party with my college friends to wear the same
shoes
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. We all ordered the same
shoes
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 from your website
and
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 they all received the right pair , but I think there may be a glitch in your system or an employee forgot to put the right pair. It's my very humble request to change my pair as soon as possible because there
is
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 almost 2 weeks left in the party. I already shared my
order
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 no and the
order
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 details
,
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 I got during the
order
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. My Gmail address is [email protected]. If you need any
further
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 information
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please feel free to contact me.
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, send me the return procedure steps, so that I can send the wrong
order
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 back to you. Hoping to hear a positive
responce
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 and resolve the issue. Yours faithfully, Manpreet Singh.

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greeting
Start with a formal greeting, such as Dear Customer Service Manager.
structure
Try to keep one idea in each paragraph and use clear links.
content
Give exact order number, date, and what was missing in a clear way.
tone
Use a polite tone and avoid casual words.
task
Finish with a clear request for a replacement and how to return the wrong item.
content
The letter states the order number and what is missing.
context
It explains why the items are important to the writer.
format
It uses a formal closing at the end.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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