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Some peple think that cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and guve your own opinions.

In a topic on the topic: "Is it better to live in the
city
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 or in the
countryside
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?"
People
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 hold different views. For
this
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 topic being discussed, I think there are advantages to living in the
city
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 and in the
countryside
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, but in my personal opinion, I think it is better to live in the
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. It is undeniable that if
people
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 choose to live in the
countryside
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, they will enjoy fresh air and clean water, which will be a very good choice for those who want to stay healthy. But at the same time,
people
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 living in the
countryside
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 face a problem,
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, the lack of supporting infrastructure.
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, for the elderly living in the
countryside
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, the medical infrastructure will be far away from them, which
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 certain hidden dangers
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 the health of the elderly. For young
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 living in rural
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, the economic situation in rural
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 is much lower than that in urban
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, so young
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 who choose to live in rural
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 can only get relatively low-paying jobs, which is very bad for their career development.
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,
people
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 living in cities will have access to more jobs than in rural
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, and have supporting infrastructure,
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 as large hospitals, shopping malls, and flat roads.
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people
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 living in cities
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have more job opportunities and are more likely to get a job with a high salary, which will be very good for their future development.
To sum up
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, I think it would be better to choose to live in the
city
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 than to live in the
countryside
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structure
Plan with a short start, two body paragraphs, and a close. Put your view at the end.
content
Add more clear ideas in each paragraph and give one good example for each idea.
linking
Link ideas with small join words like but, also, and then.
grammar
Use simple and short sentences. Check grammar to fix run on ideas.
conclusion
End with a strong line that restates your view.
opinion
The essay shows a clear view that city life can be better.
balance
The piece gives reasons for both sides.
structure
There is a closing line that states the choice.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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