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Some businesses observe that people who just finished college have a hard time interacting with collegues in working as a team.What do you think is the reason behind this? What are your suggestions to address this problem?

There's
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 a few businesses companies are
feeling
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having
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a
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problem
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problems
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about
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with
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 time interacting with
who
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those who
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just
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have just
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has been
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apply
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finished
the
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apply
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college when they are working as a group. I think it happens
why
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because
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 we are
stiil
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still
 learning about
ourselfs
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ourselves
, we are not
madure
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mature
to
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enough to
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 be
open mind
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open-minded
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 at work. But there's a
solutions
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solution
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for
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to
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our
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apply
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improve
this
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 kind of skill. The reason is
because
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that
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 when we start in
the
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a
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 new position, everything is a new experience, and we are not
confidence
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confident
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 enough to be really friendly.
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there's
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there are
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 some programs for
this
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 type of
workers
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worker
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 that start in a company as
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an aprendice
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aprendice
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apprentice
,
then
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 we will work
together with
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 other people
that
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who
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 have
same
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the same
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 experience. The solution to solve
this
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 problem could be
a
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an
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aprendice
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apprentice
programs
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program
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 at all
kind
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kinds
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 of companies. They can create a communication skill course for the new workers
learn
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to learn
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 about it,
also
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 it will help them to be
madure
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mature
 and get motivation to talk with everyone,
for
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example
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example,
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 they could have a
meet
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meeting
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 to discuss
about
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apply
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this
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 topic
one
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once
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day
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apply
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a week. In conclusion, the
businesses
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business
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campanies
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companies
are
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apply
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understand that
has
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they have
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 a problem with these people, but they have to understand the side of
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this
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these
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 people and improve
your
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their
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self help
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self-help
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 team. It will be the best way for everybody
be
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to be
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 happy and productive.

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structure
Make a clear plan. Start with a short intro, state the problem, then give two reasons, then two solutions, and end with a short finish.
grammar
Use simple and correct sentences. Check word form and plural. Use easy words.
content
Give real, small examples of work in a line of change. It shows you know the point.
cohesion
Use linking words to show order and link ideas: first, also, but, because, so.
vocabulary
Save spelling and easy words. Do not use hard words.
content
The writer tries to show a reason and a fix.
content
An idea of training with the child or new staff.
structure
There is a clear end line that restates the idea.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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