The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates
,
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what young people tend to
choice
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as
the
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their best transportation,
cars
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,
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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, and
bicycle
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bicycles
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. In four different countries
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is
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The
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UK
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,
United
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the United
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States,
France
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and
italy
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Italy
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.
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, young adults
prefers
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prefer
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to use
cars
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in all
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three countries by far
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Italy has the lead by significant figures.
While
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the
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Uk
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and the US
has
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have
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the same percentage,
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however
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however,
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France
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has
bigger
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a bigger
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number of young people who use
bicycle
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bicycles
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rather than
car
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cars
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, the
UK
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were
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second
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, and Italy
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third
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was third
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, the US were
last
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but
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, but
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this
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wasn't the
second
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highest,
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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was
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were
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the
second
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by a huge amount,
while
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the rest
has
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had
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similar figures on
this
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one.
To begin
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with,
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cars
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in Italy
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,
in
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cars
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Italy
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were the highest
one
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by over 70% , came
second
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with
tied
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the
UK
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and the US for each one
of
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60%,
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lastly
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lastely,
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France
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which
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, which
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had
small
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a small
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number
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compared
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with the others
by
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, by
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just 40%.
Then
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we have
motorcylce
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motorcycle
, which the United States has
lead
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on
it
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by 30%, it has a significant
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with the other countries, which
they has
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have
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around 10%
,
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(The
UK
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was only 10%,
France
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was higher than that by just over 10%, and Italy has less than 10%).
Next,
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bicycle
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bicycles
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,
were
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France
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take
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takes
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the lead on
this
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by over 45%, greater than the others,
while
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the United Kingdom were exactly 30%, and Italy was over 10%.
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Finally
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The
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States were it was only 10%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, uk, france, second with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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