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The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates
gold
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the gold
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sales
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 amount over the year (
starts
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apply
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from
january
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January
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 to
december
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December
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) of 2002 in millions of Dirhams for Dubai.
Overall
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, Dubai witnessed the highest
sales
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 in
march
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March
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,
whereas
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lowest
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the lowest
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 exchange happened in the
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month
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months
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 of
july
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July
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 and
september
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September
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.
Begining
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Beginning
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month
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january
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January
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, represents that Dubai stood at 200
million
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of
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apply
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Dirham and
then
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 slightly increased
around
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to around
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 230
million
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 in the next
month
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,
february
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February
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by
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, by
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saleing
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selling
golds
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gold
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. After that, there was a significant
rose
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rise
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 in
saleing
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sales
 and
amount
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the amount
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 reached
at
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apply
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350
million
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. But, from the
month
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 of
april
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April
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 to
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July
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july
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july,
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 there was
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a nosedrived
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nosedrived
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nosedive
 in gold
sales
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. It sharply decreased from 350
million
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 to around 120
million
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.
Although
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, graph presents a downward
trade
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trend
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, there was a moderate
climbed
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climb
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 in
sales
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 in the
month
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 of August
with
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, with
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more
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apply
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almost 200
million
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.
However
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, it fell in
september
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September
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 to near 120
million
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,which was similar to
july
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July
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.
Furthermore
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,
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from october
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october
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October
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 to
december
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December
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there
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, there
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 was a modest
rose
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rise
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 in
sales
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 from 120
million
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 to
near
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nearly
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 200
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, month, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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