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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Newspapers
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 are becoming defined as an outdated technology, since the innovation of the internet
becomes
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 more and more popular. I partly agree with that thought because there are some elderly
people
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 who are not able to understand the new technology, and are still reading
newspapers
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.
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 with, most adults and adolescents
utilize
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 the internet to find out or follow news,
due to
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 the new innovation is more accessible and cheaper than hard-printed ones.
Consequently
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, readers of
newspapers
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 are decreasing
day
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 by
day
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Moreover
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, it is named as a thing of the past
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while
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, while
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 the number of features
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 which
newspapers
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 offer
,
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are
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 no longer essential or remarkable for
people
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For instance
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, most young
people
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 prefer social media
instead
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 of
newspapers
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 to reach knowledge or follow the news, since they offer easy access and more accurate
knowledge
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information
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 than
newspapers
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.
However
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, there are some old
people
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 who still use
newspapers
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 to follow the agenda,
due to
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 they are not able to
utilize
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 the internet.
In other words
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, they do not know how to control social media or even a phone. I argue that it is impossible for printed media to be a thing which is no longer used.
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, most
aged
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elderly
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people
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 usually buy and read
newspapers
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 in the markets. They still do
this
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 routine
day
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day
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To sum up
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, I believe that it is unreal for
newspapers
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 to be an unutilized thing, yet they are no
more
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 popular. Most
people
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except
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, except
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 older
ones
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ones,
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 use technological things,
such
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 as search engines, social media…
For
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this
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 reason, I partially agree with that belief.

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task response
State your view clearly in one line at the start of your essay and keep it as your guide.
coherence
Make a plan before you write: intro, 2-3 body ideas, conclusion. Use linking words to show how ideas fit together.
grammar vocabulary
Fix small grammar and word form errors. Use simple, correct words and short sentences.
task response
You show a view on the topic and give a clear stance.
coherence
There is a basic shape with paragraphs and some links between ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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