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Writing Samples
Band 4

In the past, everyone wore clothes according to their culture, but now people wear similar clothes all around the world. Is this positive or negative development Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge and experience

World
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The world
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 is becoming a multicultural nowadays. People tend to
intimitate
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imitate
 the other individual in order to look similar
especially
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, especially
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 the
celebrtities
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celebrities
. In history, natives used to dress
according to
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 their culture and background
which
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, which
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distinguish
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distinguished
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 them from different communities
but
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, but
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this
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 trend seems to
disappear
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have disappeared
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 nowadays.
This
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affect
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effect
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 has both
positives
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positive
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 and negative aspects
which
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, which
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 will be discussed in the upcoming paragraph.
To begin
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with
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with,
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 the merits of people
wear
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wearing
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task
The idea is not finished. The plan is not clear. Finish your sentences and write a clear view at the end.
coherence
Give one clear example to show your point. Use simple words to explain.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like first, next, and finally. Make 1 idea per paragraph.
style
Check spelling and grammar. Short, plain sentences help.
topic
You start to think about how dress changes from old to now.
balance
You try to talk about both sides of the issue.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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