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Band 4.5

lt is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many
people
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 believe that saving
money
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 is ideal for all generations of
people
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 that
include
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including
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 young ones . I agree with
this
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 statement because
this
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money
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 will be very useful during tough situations and can be used to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 one 's dreams . Life is full of ups and downs all the
times
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time
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. Happiness takes a second to get flipped into sorrow
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therefore
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; therefore
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saving
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, saving
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 is
primary
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 priority . The
money
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 saved by an individual serves as a helping hand to
oneself
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oneself,
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thus
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 it is
viable
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a viable
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 way to carry out their needs .
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 ,
There
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there
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 is no need to seek help or borrow
money
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 from one another.
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 ,
During covid
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during COVID
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,
people
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 who had
great
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a great
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 amount of savings were able to survive without being affected by the
surroundings
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surroundings,
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 as so many
people
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loss
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lost
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 their jobs . In
this
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 modern era , everyone likes to purchase goods and complete their wishlist . Inflation is
upto
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up to
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which
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, which
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 makes it hard to get these done
as
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, as
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 earning nowadays is only hand to mouth
leading
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, leading
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 to
very
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a very
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less
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small
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 percentage of spending it on miscellaneous things . By saving
money
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 every month , tiny portions will turn into a big sum
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hence
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, hence
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,
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apply
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can easily be
spend
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spent
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 on fulfilling their desire .
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 , using savings for travelling , buying brands and so on . In conclusion , Saving is essential for all ages . It should be a habit so that a person can buy things of their
will
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own will
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 and does not face problems during bad periods of life.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. This helps you keep a clear flow and simple ideas.
structure
Use clear topic sentences. Start each paragraph with a line that states its main idea.
coherence
Link ideas better. Use simple words like and, but, also, for example, in addition.
content
Give more exact examples. If you mention Covid or travel, add a short detail on how saving helped.
language
Check punctuation and grammar. Use short sentences to avoid long errors.
content
The answer shows a clear view that you agree with saving money.
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You use examples to back points.
content
Reason for saving is given as a useful life idea.
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