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Some people say that to host international sports has lot of problems than benefits. To what extend do you agree?

Hosting an international
sports
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event
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 has serious repercussions for the
host
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country
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, which range from
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economic costs to
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social factors at play. I believe
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 events are not as beneficial as they used to be for a
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, and that they have far more disadvantages than potential benefits. First off, we must consider the fact that it takes years of preparation and billions of dollars for a
country
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 to be able to
host
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 an international
sports
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event
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 as the World Cup. Representatives from countries go to great lengths to secure their spot as a
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, through lobbying and various other
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political
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 gives us the impression that hosting
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 events is largely beneficial.
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, in my opinion, it is the state that reaps most of the benefits,
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 the
country
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's working population has to bear the burden of the costs.
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,
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 countries must assemble a huge
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 force to complete the construction of stadiums in a timely manner.
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 will often lead to
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 operating in
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, inhumane conditions, on top of not being paid proportionately.
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,
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 the
country
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's state gets to market itself globally as a champion of
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 and a tourism hub, the reality paints a different picture. The massive costs of construction and preparation get passed down to the native population through higher taxes and price increases on essential goods for years after the international
sports
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event
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 has concluded.
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,
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 I acknowledge that hosting an international
event
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 can positively impact a
country
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's image worldwide, it is not always a given. In fact, hosting
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 an
event
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 may end up being counterproductive if the goal is to improve your nation's image. To be more specific, it is very possible that the foreign attendees have a poor experience in the
host
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country
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 for various reasons, ranging from a clash of cultures
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 to natural and environmental disasters. Nowadays, with the advent of technology and the constant access to the internet and social networks, bad news
gets
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spread
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 very fast.
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, a family who was unable to attend one of the football matches that they bought tickets for,
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unforseen
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unforeseen
 circumstances,
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 as heavy rain, may end up blaming the
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country
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's authorities for their incompetence. Once their poor experience gets shared by social media influencers and global news outlets, it will significantly harm the
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country
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's reputation and paint it in a negative light.
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, hosting an international
sports
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event
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 comes with downsides that far outweigh the potential benefits for a
country
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. Not only
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country
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 to spend an exorbitant amount of money to prepare for said international
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, which is unlikely to financially benefit the native population, but
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, the
country
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's image and credibility on the world stage may suffer
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. Ultimately, if I had been given the opportunity to choose to
host
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 an international
event
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, I would pass
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 and allocate the budget to other priorities,
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Put your view in the first lines and keep it clear. A short sentence at the start helps the read to know your aim.
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Try to show both sides, then give a clear view of which side you take. This gives balance and strength.
coherence
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coherence
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content
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language
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strength
Clear stance on the topic.
structure
Good plan with an intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
evidence
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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