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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
The table provides data and future projections about the proportion of people aged 65 and above in three countries
Canada
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, Canada
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,
Germany
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, and the
UK
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for
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 the years 1988, 2000, and 2030. It is clearly seen that the
percentage
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 of elderly people gradually increased
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over the period.
Germany
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 is predicted to have the highest proportion of the population aged 65 and above throughout,
while
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UK
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 consistently has the lowest. In 1988,
Germany
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 had the largest elderly population, with 20.45% of its citizens aged 65 or older, followed by Canada at 16.32%. The
UK
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 had the smallest
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 at 14.23%. By the year 2000, all three countries experienced increases.
Germany
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’s elderly population rose significantly to 25.32%,
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 Canada’s figure increased to 20.67%. The
UK
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 saw only a slight rise to 14.89%. In
2030
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2030,
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Germany
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 will still have the highest
percentage
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 at 30.42%, followed by Canada at 26.35%. The
UK
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 will have the lowest at 20.35%. In conclusion, the data illustrates that in the future
percentage
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 of elderly people in all three
countris
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countries
 will have remarkable growth.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, uk, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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