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The diagram below shows the development of one college campus from 1975 to 2002, and the projected building in 2020.

The diagram below shows the development of one college campus from 1975 to 2002, and the projected building in 2020.
The two maps illustrate the development that took place at a college campus over a 35-year period between 1975 and 2010.
Overall
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, the campus
have
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has
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 been significantly developed over the period, showing a clear increase in the number of buildings. The most notable change is the
expanded
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 of
car
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the car
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 park and the addition of new facilities. The most significant changes concern the car park and lecture rooms. In 1975, there were a lot of trees between the car park and
lecture
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the lecture
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 rooms located
at
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on
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 the right side.
However
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, both buildings
have been
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were
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 combined in 2010 and earned more space.
Additionally
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, a new IT
centre
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 has been constructed,
building
Wrong verb form
built
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from
Change preposition
on
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 the left side of the library. Regarding the gallery, the area between the
sport
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sports
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centre
Use synonyms
 and
IT
Correct article usage
the IT
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centre
Use synonyms
 has a new road. The road relative to the
sport
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sports
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centre
Use synonyms
 and lecture rooms
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 has been cut down to build up new science building.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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