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The given line graph illustrates the figure for carbon dioxide emitted by each person in four countries in Europe over a span of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007.

The given line graph illustrates the figure for carbon dioxide emitted by each person in four countries in Europe over a span of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007.
The line diagram depicts the
emission
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 of
carbon
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 dioxide in metric
tons
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as
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apply
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per person in four
Europian
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European
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 countries
namely
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, namely
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-
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 the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal
from
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, from
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 the year of 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, on one side, the
carbon
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emission
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 rate of the UK and Sweden shows
downward
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a downward
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trade
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trend
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,
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, Italy and Portugal demonstrate
upward
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an upward
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trade
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trend
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. The United Kingdom emitted the highest
carbon
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 among the four countries. Its
carbon
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emission
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 stood at almost 11 metric
tons
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 in
1967
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1967,
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then
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 gradually fell and accounted for around 9 metric
tons
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that
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apply
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in 2007. The
emission
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 rate of
carbon
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 was the lowest for Portugal, near 2 metric
tons
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 in the year
of
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1967
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1967,
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while
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 it significantly increased in the following
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years
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yeas
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yeas,
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ended at
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reaching
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 approximately 6.
Although
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,
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 Swedeen started from around 9 metric
tons
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 and
then
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 rose slightly above 10
but
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, but
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afterthat
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after that
 decreased gradually
untill
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until
met
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it met
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 Portugal in 2007 at 6 metric
tons
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.
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, Italy witnessed
moderate
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a moderate
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climbed
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 starting from almost 4 metric
tons
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carbon
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of carbon
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emission
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emissions
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 to double in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words emission, carbon, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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