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The chart shows requests information at a tourist office in the UK from January to June

The chart shows requests information at a tourist office in the UK from January to June
The provided graph demonstrates how many
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requests
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of requests
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 for
infirmation
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information
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 at a tourist office in the UK between January and June. One striking feature is that
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requests
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 for information in person and by telephone experienced an
increese
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increase
,
while
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requests
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 by letter or email underwent a decrease in
given
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the given
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period
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.
In person
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 inquiries indicated the most
prefered
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preferred
, but
requests
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 by letter demonstrated the lowest level by
ultimatly
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ultimate
period
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. It is evident from the data that
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apply
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aplications
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applications
 in person accounted for 400 in January, and started to increase till the ultimate
period
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. In
preliminary
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the preliminary
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period
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,
inquires
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inquiries
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 by letter and email amounted to 800
which
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, which
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 decreased and reached to 400 in
may
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May
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 and remained stable till June.
Requests
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 by telephone
totaled
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totalled
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to
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apply
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1000 in the initial
period
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, and
then
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 decreased to 800 in
february
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February
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,
had risen
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rose
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 and reached 1000 in
mart
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March
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, stayed stable
untill aprel
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until April
, and started to increase till the ultimate
period
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words requests, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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