The graph bellow shows Twitter use by age group in the USA between November 2010 and May 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph bellow shows Twitter use by age group in the USA between November 2010 and May 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph bellow shows Twitter use by age group in the USA between November 2010 and May 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data represents Twitter use in the United States by
age
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group between November 2010 and May 2013. Throughout the
timeline
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there was an increase in all
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groups,
although
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people between the ages of 18 to 29 have occupied the biggest proportion in the
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, in August of 2010 reaching its high at over 30% after rocketing in a year from being at less than 20%. Older people, ages 50-64,
as well as
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those over 65 years
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have a similar pattern on the
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and occupy the lowest position. Seniors hit a peak in April of 2011 at a little bit over 5%
, since
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then
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there
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fluctuation in the
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, but no higher percentage
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reached. In comparison, the percentage of the
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group of 50-64 years old who had a very stable start and had a very subtle rise alongside the seniors in April 2011 and an insignificant decrease three months later, rose gradually.
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to older
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groups, 30–49-year-olds had more fluctuation at the beginning. The start is between 5 and 10%, but in the first
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the
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soared by approximately 5%,
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went down to 10%. After 8 months of inconsistency, since August
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2011
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2011,
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it had the most stable increase.

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