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The graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2007.

The graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2007.
The graph illustrates three consumption spreads of ingredients
are
Verb problem
apply
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used from 1981 to 2007 , which are (margarine, low-fat & reduced and butter). Units are measured by Grams.
Overall
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, the
butter
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apply
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use decreases
throughout
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over
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years
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the years
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 .
Oppesod
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Opposed
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to
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using low-fat & reduced are increasing by
years
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the years
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 compared to margarine
which
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, which
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 is considered an average amount of
viruse ingreadient
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virgin ingredient
. Regarding the graph, the usage of butter has decreased rapidly from about 140
g
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/y .
While
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 the consumption of Margarine
going
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has gone
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slow
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slowly
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 from less than 100
g
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 in 1980 to exactly 40
g
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 by 2007.
On the other hand
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 , the usage of low-fat &
reduces
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reduced
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 jumped from less than 20 grams to a bit over 80g between 1996 to 2001.
However
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, the low-fat & reduced went down from 2002 to 2007, approximately 70 grams.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words g with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 4 times.
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