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Band 5.5

"The maps below show changes in the road access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.

"The maps below show changes in the road access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
The given maps
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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 the changes that have taken place in road access to a
city
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 hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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access to a
city
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 hospital will become more convenient for visitors with some
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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. Generally, it can be seen that the
area
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undergone
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has undergone
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 significant development
with
Punctuation problem
, with
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 the most notable changes being the construction of new facilities,
such
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 as separate parking for both public and staff. In 2007, the
area
Use synonyms
 mainly
consist
Wrong verb form
consisted
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 of
car
Correct article usage
a car
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 park and public
staff
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space
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. There was a main road running through the
area
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 , and most of the land was undeveloped. There were bus stops on both
west
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the west
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 and east sides of hospital roads. By 2010, the
area
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 had experienced major
modernization
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modernisation
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. The bus stops were replaced by
new
Correct article usage
a new
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 bus station and staff car park.
In addition
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, a public car park was built along the
city
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 hospital. Meanwhile,
ring
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the ring
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 road access to
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city
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the city
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 hospital remained
same
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the same
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.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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