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Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced number of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

NOWADAYS, INDIVIDUALS DEPEND THEIR COMMUNICATION ON MODERN METHODS LIKE
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 EMAIL AND MESSAGING EACH OTHER, RATHER THAN FACE TO FACE.
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, SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT
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 TREND HAS NEGATIVELY IMPACTED THEIR SOCIAL LIVES. I PARTIALLY CONCUR WITH
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DUE TO
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 ITS DEPENDENCE ON THE SITUATION OF THE PERSON.
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 WITH, COMMUNICATING WITH OTHER PEOPLE ON EMAIL OR EVEN MESSAGE THEM CAN SAVE OUR TIME, ESPECIALLY IF WE DO NOT HAVE MUCH TIME FOR TALKING OR SEEING THEM BECAUSE OF OUR WORK OR THE LONG
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SPOT TO
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ANOTHER
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. THE TIME THAT YOU SHOULD WASTE ON COMMUTING, YOU CAN SAVE
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 BY MESSAGING THEM.
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, IF I GO TO A CAFE TO SEE MY FRIENDS, I SPEND MORE THAN 1 HOUR ON THE WAY
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 THE TRAFFIC JAM,
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 I CAN JUST OPEN MY PHONE AND TALK TO THEM, WHICH WILL TAKE A MINUTE. WITH REGARD TO SOCIAL LIVES, MEETING ODD PEOPLE
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 YOU RECOGNIZE
THEM
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THROUGH
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 SOCIAL MEDIA.
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DANGEROUS
, IT CAN IMPACT YOUR SOCIAL LIVES BECAUSE YOU DO NOT KNOW THEM AND THEY MIGHT BRING THE PROBLEMS TO YOU, BY CHANGING YOUR
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PERSONALITY
 AND BELIEFS, WHICH WILL REFLECT ON YOUR SOCIAL LIFE. IN A NUTSHELL, THOUGH MODERN FORMS OF COMMUNICATION CAN FACILITATE OUR LIFE,
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 PROBLEMS. SO, IT DEPENDS ON THE PERSON
HIMSELF
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structure
Make your view clear in the opening and restate it at the end.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph and start each with a clear topic sentence.
language
Check spelling and fix basic grammar so the meaning is easy to read.
content
Give more short, real examples to back your points.
content
You show a real attempt to take a view, not just say yes or no.
structure
There is a good note that new way to chat can save time.
content
You talk about both sides, which fits the task.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital communication
  • face-to-face interactions
  • superficial relationships
  • social bonds
  • non-verbal cues
  • text-based communication
  • tone of voice
  • facial expressions
  • body language
  • digital presence
  • real-life relationships
  • deterioration
  • long-distance relationships
  • misunderstandings
  • emotional richness
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