IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

The plans below show a small theatre In 2010, and the same theatre in 2012.

The two maps illustrate the layout of a theatre in 2010 and how it was redesigned in 2008.
Overall
Linking Words
, the stage space was enlarged and several facilities,
such
Linking Words
 as a restaurant and a corridor, were introduced to improve the visitor experience. In 2010, the theatre consisted mainly of an auditorium, which was placed at the centre of the building. Behind the backstage of viewers' seats, the registration hall was placed , including the admin office and ticket office on the left-hand side of the entrance door, and there was a small cafe on the right-hand side of the main gate.
By contrast
Linking Words
, in 2012, major changes had taken place in the structure of the building. The auditorium area remained the same size in the same location. Regarding the stage, which was significantly increased in detention. The corridor was built backstage of the concert area.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the dressing room and showers took the place of the storage, which was removed to the east side of the scene. On the registration area, for admin office was constructed new room opposite the showers section.
Instead
Linking Words
 of a small cafe, the restaurant was open to raise the number , and the ticket counter took its place.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Task response
Plan your answer. Start with a short look at what the maps show, then talk about 2010 and 2012 in order. Keep one idea per part.
Coherence and cohesion
Be sure to tell what was kept the same and what was added or moved. Use simple linking words like first, next, then, but, and also.
Strength
The text shows there is an idea of change over time.
Strength
An overview sentence is present.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: