What qualities do you think are most important in a hero? Give reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are a lot of heroes in the world. But what qualities did they have to become heroes?
This
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heroes need to be brave.
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you could help someone and you want to help, but you are scared,
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you will freeze in your place and you won’t be able to do anything.
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you need compassion.
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, you could be able to help, but you just
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care
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you
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feel bad for the ones that need help,
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you
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have a reason to help.
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you need determination. If you are not determined
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you
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do anything. It’s hard to help others
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because you are not doing it for yourself
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you
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get anything from it. And you
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start something and
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leave it when it gets too hard
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you need to finish what you have started. In the
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I can say that to be a
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you need a lot of qualities
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name them all. But in my
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the most important are bravery, compassion and determination. Because without
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them,
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you
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become a
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, you won’t be able to save anyone. Without
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you shouldn’t even try to be a
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structure
Plan the essay with one idea per paragraph and a clear topic sentence.
content
Give more clear and exact examples to support each idea.
cohesion
Use simple links to show how ideas connect, such as 'also', 'and', or 'so' at the start of a sentence.
form
Check the full stop, capital letter and spelling to make the writing tidy.
content
The essay stays on the topic and gives three main qualities.
structure
There is a clear start and end with an introduction and a conclusion.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • courage
  • honesty
  • empathy
  • kindness
  • caring
  • help
  • save
  • protect
  • trust
  • responsibility
  • action
  • brave
  • duty
  • example
  • lead
  • support
  • community
  • safe
  • risk
  • sacrifice
  • decide
  • feel
  • show
  • stand
  • care
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