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Many people say that globalization and the growing number of miltinational companies have a negative effect on the environment .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

It's crucial to improve road safety
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 increasing the minimum permitted age for driving is not a solution. The streets should have all the actors for safety.
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, it's not fair to increase the minimum permitted age for driving because it's not the only reason. The youngsters have their right to drive. The most common reason for the accident is drunk drivers
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 there are more
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accidents involving older people
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 rather than
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young people.
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, to improve road safety, there are many ways to do that ,
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 as the minimum age for driving,
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, my grandfather had
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an accident
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 and it was his fault
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 he couldn't see right. My point of view,
Idisagree
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I disagree
 with the statement side. In conclusion, it's important to find a solution to improve it , but the suggestion in the statement I disagree with it and it's not a good idea. There were studies about the drivers at
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the University
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 of Hull,
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 them, the young drivers had the minimum number of penalties.

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structure
Plan your essay first. Use 4 simple parts: intro, idea 1, idea 2, conclusion. Each part has one clear idea.
task
Make your view clear in the intro and restate it in the conclusion.
examples
Give one clear example for each idea and explain it with simple words.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas: and, but, because, also, for example.
content
You try to state a clear view on the topic.
content
You use an example about a family member and a study.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • industrial expansion
  • pollution
  • carbon emissions
  • prioritize profit
  • environmental regulations
  • resource depletion
  • environmental degradation
  • production practices
  • supply chain
  • deforestation
  • loss of biodiversity
  • mass consumerism
  • waste production
  • environmental harm
  • international regulations
  • exploit
  • environmental standards
  • developing countries
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