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Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main source in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative source of energy (wind and solar energy) are encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

The natural resources like gas,
oil
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 and coal are
prioritized
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prioritised
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 in many nations
but
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, but
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 on the other
side
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hand
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, the other forms of artificial energy like wind and solar are used by most
of
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apply
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regions. In my opinion, it is positive encouragement towards the country as it will help in saving the natural resources for the tougher
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time
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times
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and
also
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community
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the community
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 will get rid of pollution and
saves
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save
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 money
on
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at
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 the same
time
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. These points will be discussed by me in the following paragraphs with examples. In the first positive development, the natural resources can be saved for
future
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the future
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. As the
oil
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 and natural gas are limited to
the
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apply
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some extent and will be
diminshed
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diminished
 by a period of
time
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. The various movements in future where we need these materials
at
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in
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the
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an
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time
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 of emergency.
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,
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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recent reports from the government of India
,
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apply
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shows
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show
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 that in
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the 2040s
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2040s
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2040s,
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me
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I
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 want to make
largest
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the largest
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industralization
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industrialisation
 in the world
for
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, for
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that
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which
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 various
resouces
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resources
 are needed
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such
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, such
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 as coal and
oil
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etc
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, etc
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.
Moreover
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,
the
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apply
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coal, gas and
oil
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is
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are
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 very expensive to afford as people can use the alternative
resouces
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resources
 which are available with the goodness of wind and sun energy
and
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, and
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also
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 it does not
harms
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harm
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 the
enviornment
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environment
at
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under
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 any condition.
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,
In china
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in China
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, the pollution
goes
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has increased
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 to 10% in the community
only
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apply
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due to
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launch
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the launch
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 of solar cars with
works
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work
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 on solar power. In conclusion, the
postive
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positive
 effects of using wind and solar energy will make the world
and
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an
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 efficient place to live
and
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, and
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 fossil fuels
remain
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will remain
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 safer for the upcoming generation.

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task response
For task response, show a clear view and state how much you agree. A short plan in the first paragraph and a short summary at the end help a lot. add a balanced note if needed.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, use one idea per paragraph. Start with a simple sentence that gives the idea, then add one or two sentences to explain and give a simple example. Use linking words like and, but, also, for example to move ideas.
opinion
The essay shows a clear view that wind and solar energy can help.
evidence
Some examples are used to show pollution and cost as issues.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Economic benefits
  • Energy security
  • Energy dependency
  • Infrastructure investment
  • Intermittent nature
  • Sustainable development
  • Technological innovation
  • Renewable energy sector
  • Pollution reduction
  • Job creation
  • Energy diversification
  • Global energy market
  • Geopolitical tensions
  • Supply chain disruptions
  • Energy storage systems
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