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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Some
people
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 argue that in the next years, no one
would
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will
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 like to have printed newspapers or
books
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, since they will prefer to read everything
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online without any payment. I completely disagree with that belief because printed media is
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an
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 essential culture for some societies.
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, there may be some individuals who will prefer printed writings because
their
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of their
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 preferences.
To begin
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 with, printed media is a vital
culture among the
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the culture among
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 collectors. There are a lot of
people
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 who collect
items
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,
such
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 as
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
books
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.
Therefore
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, hard-print is
fundemental
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fundamental
of
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to
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 collectors.
For instance
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, the percentage of
the
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people
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 who keep
items
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increased
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has increased
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, as the number of printed newspapers or
books
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steadily
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has steadily
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decreasing
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decreased
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. Some collectors keep these
items
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,
due to
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 printed media will be removed in the future.
However
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, it will not because most of them want to add missing parts
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to
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 their collections.
Secondly
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, some
people
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 only prefer to read hard-printed copies because the feeling of touching real things or
smell
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the smell
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 of a new book makes them happy,
also
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 makes the experiences unforgettable.
For example
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, a survey
which
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completed in Turkey illustrates that most
people
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selected
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prefer
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 to read a printed book or a newspaper when they wake up because online ones are not able to give them the same feeling of reading.
Lastly
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, there will be some
people
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 who can not be able to control technological devices to read a book or a newspaper.
For instance
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, most elderly
people
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 believe that they will not be able
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to utilize
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utilize
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utilise
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 technology for reading or even only personal usage.
Consequently
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, there will be printed
books
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 or newspapers for these
people
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 who can not use online.
To sum up
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,
i
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I
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 completely disagree with the belief
of
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that
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 all printed
items
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 will be transformed into online. Since
,
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apply
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 there will be
people
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such
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 as who are not able to use technology, who only prefer the hard-printed writings or who try to complete their
collections
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collections,
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 are
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a majorty
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majorty
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major
of
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part of
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 the population.

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planning and clarity
Make your view clear at the start and end. Use one plan: intro with your view, para 2 with reason 1, para 3 with reason 2, para 4 with reason 3 and a short conclusion.
development
Grow each main idea with one real example and a short line to show why it helps your view.
grammar and accuracy
Fix spelling and grammar. Watch words like fundemental, majorty, utilize, can not; use 'fundamental', 'majority', 'use', 'cannot'.
coherence
Use simple link words to show order and cause: first, also, but, however, so, therefore.
organization
Keep each idea in one paragraph and do not repeat the same idea. Check your points and end with a strong conclusion.
strength
You state a clear view that you disagree with the idea.
strength
You give more than one reason to back your view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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