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Band 4

People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 Some say that if you pick a career path earlier in life, you will have a better chance at feeling a sense of
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satisfaction
 in your working life.
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, changing jobs at a frequent rate
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 can potentially leave you feeling
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 to settle down. I completely agree with
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that statement, as
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 that doing the former helps an individual lead a
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 life with
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clarity
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 have enough time to plan ahead. 
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 with, deciding on a
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career
 path at
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an early age, as a middle schooler
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 instance, aids in providing the student with a vision, or something exciting to look
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 to. Supposedly, that should guide the student to work
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towards their chosen
 path early,
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gaining
 experiences and making a social network along the way. Later, when the job is obtained, it becomes a lot easier to adapt to it, which eventually leads to contentment. An example of that would be when I made up my mind on becoming a professional educator back in high school, and for the next five years, I worked on mastering the skills necessary, like becoming excellent at public speaking.
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, I currently appreciate my job as a teacher.  Another reason why picking a
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career
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 is ensuring that there is enough time to plan ahead. Let’s say, I, years in
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, planned on being a teacher
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 spent the upcoming years asking employees in the same profession about what
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it
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 like, what
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, and whatnot. I
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 confident with my
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,
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 comfortable with it. Ultimately, preparing gotmr feeling easier and content. 
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, I think you should attempt to pick your
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career
 as early as possible, since it can help in leading you feel
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fulfilled
, by preparing you,
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 to providing you with a vision and clear instructions.

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structuring
Plan what you want to say before writing. Make one clear point in the first paragraph and keep to it.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar errors, such as carrer->career, thier->their, forewords->forward, chose->chosen, etc.
coherence
Use a clear main idea in each paragraph and link ideas with simple connectors like and, also, but, so.
content
Give a real example and add some detail to explain why it shows the point.
conclusion
End with a short closing that restates your view.
content
The writer shows a clear view that early choice can help.
content
An example from the writer's life is included.
structure
The essay keeps to the topic for most of the time.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career path
  • job satisfaction
  • professional goals
  • climb the career ladder
  • develop expertise
  • long-term commitment
  • financial security
  • varied experiences
  • prevent monotony
  • job security
  • career progression
  • personal preferences
  • industry dynamics
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