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The table illustrates the percentage of students attending four secondary school types from 2000 and 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table illustrates the percentage of students attending four secondary school types from 2000 and 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates the
percentage
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 of
students
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 attending four secondary school types from 2000 and 2009
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable fall in the
percentage
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 of
students
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 attending in Specialist, Grammar and Voluntary-controlled
schools
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,
while
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 the Community
schools
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 showed gradual increase in the
percentage
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 of
students
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. Another interesting point is that Voluntary-controlled
schools
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 were at the first place in 2000, but in 2009 Community
schools
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 become popular. Looking at the details, as regards Specialist
schools
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 table started at 12% in 2000,
then
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 there was a steeply decrease in the number of
students
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 from 2000 to 2005 by having 11%, and 10% in 2009 . If we look at Grammar
schools
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 it started at 24% in 2000,
then
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 there was a considerable fall over the period by having 19% in 2005 and 12% in 2009.
Also
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 there was slight decrease in the
percentage
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 of Voluntary-controlled
schools
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, by starting at 52% in 2000,
then
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 there was a decrease at which point it had 38% in 2005.
Next,
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the trend went down and had 20% in 2009.
By contrast
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, the
percentage
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 of Community
schools
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 showed considerable increase over the period. From 2000 to 2005 it started to increase and had 38% in 2005. After
then
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 there was a gradual climb in the number of pupils in 2009 and had 58% of
students
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 by making it the most popular
schools
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 in 2009

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 3 times.
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