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Writing Samples
Band 4

It is too expensive to look after and repair old building .Tho money should spend on building new modern buildings instead .To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Many people think
repaire
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repairing
 old
buliding
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buildings
cost
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costs
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 more than starting
new
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a new
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 modern structure
one
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apply
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. In my opinion, I totally agree with it , because that will
helps
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help
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 the investor to reduce the total cost and having more safety in the buildings will reduce the hazards during disasters.
However
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, starting
new
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a new
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 brand house will give the investor more options to reduce the cost of
structure
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the structure
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 of the building
while
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 investing what
left
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is left
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 of
money
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the money
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 on the

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structure
Organize your thoughts in a clear plan. Write one short intro, two body parts with a main idea each, then a short conclusion.
language
Fix basic grammar and spelling. Use simple sentences and common words.
content
Give one or two real examples or numbers to show cost or safety. This makes your view stronger.
style
Avoid long, winding phrases. Say what you mean in a direct way.
content
You take a clear view on the topic.
content
You talk about cost and safety, which are good reasons for your view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • historical significance
  • cultural heritage
  • renovation
  • restoration
  • architectural value
  • environmentally friendly
  • community identity
  • cost efficiency
  • sustainable development
  • unique character
  • sense of place
  • long-term maintenance
  • modern construction
  • initial costs
  • economic benefits
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