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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

A museum near your house is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for voluntary/unpaid work in your letter: Explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful Give details of when you would be available for work.

Dear Sir/Ma'am My name is Vish, and I am a current resident of
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 locality. I am writing
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 letter to apply for part-time voluntary/unpaid work, and I am very much interested in
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 opportunity and as part of my college assignment.
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, I got to know from my friend who
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 an employee in your museum for a long time. I am a final-year student at Vancouver Community College. As part of my co-op work experience course, I have to complete 280 hours of experience and write a report on that.
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, I have been part of many volunteer events like On-campus, Gurudwara, Charity events and Food bank. Apart from that, I have been recognised by my instructors and peers
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 Lead for any event.
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, I am available to work on all days except Tuesday. So, please do let me know what time suits you, and I will try to accommodate to manage my schedule based on your needs and suggestions. Hoping to hear back from you. Thank you Yours sincerely, Vish x

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Task response
Explain clearly why you want to work in this museum and how your past work helps you with museum tasks.
Coherence and cohesion
Put one idea in each paragraph. Have a new paragraph for a new point.
Task response
Make your tone more formal and keep date and schedule simple.
General
Check spelling and grammar and keep sentences short.
content
You show you want to help and you are willing to learn.
tone
Polite tone and good closing in part of the letter.
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