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The pie charts below show the age groups of the users on different social media platforms in Australia in 2011.

The pie charts below show the age groups of the users on different social media platforms in Australia in 2011.
The pie charts
demonstrates
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demonstrate
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 the quantity of age groups of the
users
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 on different
platform
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platforms
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 in 2011
we
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We
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 have given
variety
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a variety
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types
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apply
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of platforms that
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the
protsent
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percentage
 of
users
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.
in
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In
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addiction
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addition
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 the
Google
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 is
dominater
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dominant
 in each
of
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apply
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year with enormous
users
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.
Afterwords
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Twitter
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, Twitter
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 shows poor
stabilization
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stabilisation
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 during years between 2011
until
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to
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 2013
Otherwise
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,
Google
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getting lose
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is losing
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 their
auditory
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audience
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 smoothly and notisably, until it reached 45
protsent
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per cent
,
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however
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however,
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 it
still
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is still
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 leading among other platforms. On
another
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the other
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 hand the Facebook faced
to
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apply
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mixed
succees
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success
. Surely if Facebook get more value and
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users
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users,
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 it might beat
Google
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 as well
In contrast
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, all of
platforms
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the platforms
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noticable
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noticeably
 changed during
period
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the period
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. Make it shorter
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Google
Punctuation problem
. Google
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 showed catastrophic
changing
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changes
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 and was
dominant
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a dominant
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 player like
platform
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a platform
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words users, google with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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