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The pie charts below show the proportion of the users on different social media platforms in Australia from 2011 to 2013.

The pie charts below show the proportion of the users on different social media platforms in Australia from 2011 to 2013.
The pie
carts
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charts
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 provide information about
top
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the top
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 5 social
medias
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media
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 (
Facebook
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, Twitter,
Linkedin
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LinkedIn
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, Google, Pinterest) that were popular from 2011 to 2013 in Australia.
Overall
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,
Facebook
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 kept dominance all years,
while
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 other platforms
also
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 went up and
deversify
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diversified
Web
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the Web
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. All media
experianced dradual
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experienced gradual
 growth,
uninclude
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except
Facebook
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. As the graphs show,
figure
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the figure
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 for Twitter experienced little growth from 21% in 2011
,
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 to 25% in 2013. The same gradual increase
were
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was
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 detected in
rate
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the rate
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 of
Linkedin
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LinkedIn
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, which grew from 10% to 15%. Popularity of Google climbed up 5% per year, so it was 5% in 2011 and went up to15% after 2 years.
Compare
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Compared
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 to others, Pinterest stood stable over the shown period, 5% in 2011, 6% in 2012 and 2012.
By contrast
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,
Facebook
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 was the biggest platform in
Australian
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the Australian
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net
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market
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, but only one figure that lost its proportions, it was more than half of
graph
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the graph
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 (59%) in 2011 and fell
down
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apply
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to 49 % in 2013,
finnaly
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finally
end
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ending
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 with 34% in
Linking Words
last
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the last
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 given year.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words facebook with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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