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Band 4.5

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge.

It is argued that
water
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 is a basic human right, and governments should provide clean
water
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 to everyone without charge, just free. I completely agree with
this
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 statement because clean
water
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 is a significant resource for getting better
health
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,
food
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, and
to improve
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improving
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 the quality of
life
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. On the one hand, clean
water
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 plays a vital role in ensuring public
health
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. Foods need clean
water
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 to prepare healthy
food
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. Clean
water
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 is the most important thing that people need to live a good
life
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.
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, if we do not have good resources for clean
water
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, we can’t treat patients.
Additionally
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, there are many studies in
New
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 York Times,
they
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which
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 published a statement about
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the detrimentals
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detrimentals
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detrimental
of
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effects of
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 dirty
water
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 in Africa in 2012; more than 42% of
Africa
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African
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 residents lost their lives, which
is
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was
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 caused by contaminated
water
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.
On the other hand
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, if states can provide free
water
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 to all houses, it will be useful and a great decision, but it is not
implemented
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.
Although
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 providing
water
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 for free may lead to overconsumption and loss without paying attention to its value, it is still significant to get clean
as well as
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 free
water
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 to enhance our community with
a
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apply
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great
health
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 and
life
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.
For example
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, when we obtain free
water
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, we can cook delicious
food
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, and
this
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 is the most
thing
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 to preserve our
health
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. In conclusion, it is essential for governments to ensure that everyone has access to clean
water
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 because it directly affects people's
health
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,
food
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 safety and quality of
life
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.

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structure
Plan before you write. Make one strong idea in the intro and restate it in the end.
content
Use real and clear facts. Explain how clean water helps health and life with easy facts.
paragraphing
Keep one idea in each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence.
accuracy
Check facts about sources. Do not quote or misstate a source.
coherence
Use simple and clear linking words. Do not use too many.
content
The writer has a clear view and makes it clear.
structure
Some good use of linking in places, like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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