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The graph shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by different countries in tonnes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by different countries in tonnes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
The bars illustrate the measured number of certain beverages imported throughout Canada, the US, the UK, and
Germany
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 in
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, coffee shared the highest volume of imports in all countries except for the UK.
In contrast
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, the United
Kingdom
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 spent the most on
tea
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 out of the three countries by a large margin. Looking closely, Canada, the United States of America, and
Germany
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 had most of
its
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 expenditure on coffee, nearing 40000
tonnes
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 for the first two, and 50000
tonnes
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 for
Germany
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. For the United
Kingdom
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,
however
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, it brought in from all around the world 30000
tonnes
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 of coffee, considered to be the lowest in comparison.
Moreover
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, both Canada and the United States of America have imported 20000
tonnes
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 of
tea
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, with the United States barely taking the lead.
Germany
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,
on the other hand
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, was second only to the United
Kingdom
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 in regard to
tea
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 imports, residing at 40000
tonnes
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.
Furthermore
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, the United
Kingdom
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 have achieved the highest number in
tea
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 imports with a staggering 80000
tonnes
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, tonnes, kingdom, tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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