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The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about the different types of media which
people
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 of various
age
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groups
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 used to get everyday
news
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 in one country in 2011.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that youngsters got
news
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 from social networks,
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 adults and elders were informed by the
radio
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. But receiving
news
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 from micro-blogging was not common among all
age
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groups
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 Looking at the details, four-fifths of young
people
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 from 10 to 29 received
news
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 from social media.
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, only 20% of elders who are 65 and over got
news
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 from the net. Turning to average
age
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groups
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 30-49 and 50-64, around 42% and 32% of them used to get
news
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 from social media,respectively. When it comes to older
people
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, they
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 to get daily
news
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 from the
radio
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. From 18
age
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 to 64, more than 90% of them listened
radio
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news
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. The percentage of
people
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 who are 65 and older was a
less
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 few, with 88%. 40% of individuals aged 10-17 got
news
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 from the
radio
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. As for getting everyday
news
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 from micro-blogging, not all
age
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groups
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 frequently use micro-blogging sites.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, groups, news, radio with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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