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Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.m

More and more
people
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 think that spending free
time
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 with families for children is necessary
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,
Others
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 argue that
this
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 has many disadvantages.
This
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 essay will discuss both
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perspectives
. On the one hand,it is believed by
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some
people
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 that children should stay with their families
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 their free
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. In fact,spending
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 with family can be an
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unforgettable
memories
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.
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, staying with family is
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safer
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 for children
instead
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 of other
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.
On the other hand
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,others claim that
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children
 should spend their free
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 with their friends .
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,it is important to know how to communicate with other
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.

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task
State your view clearly in the opening or closing line and keep it in the text.
coherence
Use one clear paragraph for each side, with a simple reason and an example.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show flow: first, next, but, also, finally.
language
Check grammar and spell common words to avoid errors.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides and shows an attempt to discuss the topic.
structure
There is some effort to link ideas with simple words.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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