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Band 2

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate the main changes that have taken place at the Porth Harbour between 2000 and the present day.
Overall
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, the harbour has been significantly developed over the period, showing a clear trend toward
modernization
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modernisation
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,
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 and improved accessibility to the public. The most notable change is the reorganisation of facilities and the addition of buildings. The most significant changes concern
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the habour
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habour
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harbour
 area and visitor access. There is another dock
has
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that has
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 been constructed beside the original one at the north edge, serving as more passenger ferries.
In
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additionally
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, the areas for marina
an
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and
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 fishing boats
has
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have
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 been exchanged.
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, the building next to the marina section has been added for showers and toilets, which
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also
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is also
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 at the north of
car
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the car
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 park that changed its
path
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path,
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 connected to the main
road
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instead
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 of the
road
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. Regarding the
buttom
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bottom
 of the map, in 2000, there was a
road
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 between
main
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the main
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road
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 and
lifeboat
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the lifeboat
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.
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, the cafes and shops
now have
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have now
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 been built next to the lifeboat.
Moreover
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, a new path used by the
visiors
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visitors
 can go to the hotel that
reorganised
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was reorganised
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 from the disused castle. The public beach at the south edge has been transformed
to
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into
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 private usage for the hotel.

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language
Fix many small grammar errors so the meaning is clear. Use the same tense for actions.
structure
Make a plan: start with a short summary, then describe the old map, then the new map, then a short compare.
coherence
Use simple link words like and, but, also, then to join ideas.
content
The idea of changes is shown.
structure
An overview sentence exists.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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