The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line
graps
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graph
shows the information about
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number
Correct article usage
the number
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of parcticipants
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parcticipants
Correct your spelling
participants
with
variety
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a variety
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of
activity
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activities
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on
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at
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the social centre in Melbourne, Australia
from
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, from
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2000 to 2020.
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Overall
Punctuation problem
Overall,
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the total activity in the graph
are
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is
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5.
Likewise
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,
film
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club
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, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and
finally
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musical performances.
While
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the most
favorite
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favourite
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is
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film
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the film
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club
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showing sustain in the top,
while
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another
having
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has
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changes
overtime
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over time
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.
Film
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club
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as well as
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martial arts remain stable in the
number
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of participants for almost 20 years, with
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number
Correct article usage
the number
show examples
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of member
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member
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members
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in martial arts is between 30 to 40.
Moreover
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,
film
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club
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clubs
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sit in the top positions with the most
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members
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member
Punctuation problem
member,
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are
Verb problem
ranging
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among
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from
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60 to 70.
the
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The
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activity
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activities
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with
increasing
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an increase
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of
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in
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members are table tennis
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along
Punctuation problem
, along
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with musical performances.
However
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, Musical performances at first
not
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did not
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having
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have
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a member from 2000 to
2005
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2005,
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thereafter
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showing
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a significantly
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significantly
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significant
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rise to slightly under 20 members.
Besides
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Table tennis
in
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, in
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2010 dramatically
rocket
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rocketed
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from only about 20 to almost 60 members in 2020.
Lastly
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, Amateur dramatics
where
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were
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starting approximately 25
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then
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, then
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rapidly
fall
Wrong verb form
fell
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from 2005 to
2020
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2020,
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with the total
number
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participants
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of participants
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to
Verb problem
falling to
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below 10.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, film, club with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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