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Band 4.5

some people think that public libraries are no longer necessary because digital technology can offer same benefits.

In contemporary society,
technology
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advancements
 have expanded widely in many
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 systems, especially with
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 to public
libraries
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.
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 some individuals argue that
comunity
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community
libraries
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 are no longer necessary because digital technology can offer the same benefits. I strongly
belive
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 that public
libraries
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 are still essential in these modern days
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this
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 essay will explore the
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reasons
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behind
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why community
libraries
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 should be preserved.
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 with, one of the primary reasons against removing public
libraries
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 is the substantial disadvantages it brings to
citizens
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citizens'
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 equal access. As many
part
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on
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of
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 the
would
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 still
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on
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internet access, especially
rural
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in rural
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eras
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,
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if
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this
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 kind of public service were
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to disapear
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disapear
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disappear
millions
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, millions
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 of people would
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 their only
source
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 of information
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This
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 not only brings
negative
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a negative
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 impact to
students
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students'
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 education
;
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,
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 workers who need to do a
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 of
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research
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such
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, such
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 as
scientist
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scientists
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. Another reason is the negative impact on cultural preservation. By replacing
tranditional
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traditional
 public
libraies
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libraries
 with technology-based systems. Because
tibraries
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libraries
 are the main
source
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 of
loca
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local
! community records and
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source
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sources
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 that could not be
founded
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found
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 on
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the internets
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internets
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internet
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.
This
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 trend could impact. to
cultual
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cultural
 heritage, if these
kind
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kinds
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 ot
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source
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sources
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 are gone
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As
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. As
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 a result,
new
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the new
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 generation may not have any
source
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 about the local history
informations
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information
. In conclusion,
although
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 some
individual
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individuals
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 mentioned that public
libraries
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 should be replaced by
technology
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technological
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advacements
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advancements
. In my opinion, it is obvious that the drawbacks of
this
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out weight
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outweigh
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 the benefits. since it
harm
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has
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 a significant effect on citizens' equal access and cultural preservation, these negative effects are undeniable.
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consequently
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, public
libraries
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 should be maintained and preserved.

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language
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coherence
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content
Give one or two strong examples to back each idea.
structure
Keep a short, clear intro and a clear finish that match the task.
content
A clear view is shown that public libraries are important.
content
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structure
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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