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You Have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don;t fully agree with this option. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter -Say which point in the article you agree with. -Explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres. -Offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article.

Dear
sir
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Sir
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, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform
about
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you about
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 an article
of
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from
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 our
country
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 suggesting that all town centres are almost similar to each other. I,
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However
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however
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,
not
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am not
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 fully
conveniced
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convinced
 by the fact
because
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for
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 several
reason
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reasons
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.
To begin
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 with, I agree with your viewpoint about the
poplulation
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population
 in each
city
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, which is equally distributed.
Moreover
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, the traffic snarls are quite common in all the town
centers
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centres
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.
Nevertheless
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, the service and
hospitalilty
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hospitality
varies
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vary
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 from
center
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centre
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 to
center
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centre
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.
For example
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, Ahmedabad
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that
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apply
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is
metropolitan
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a metropolitan
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city
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 for
textile
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the textile
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 industry,
whereas
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 high-tech
city
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 in hyderbad, which is famous for
IT
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its IT
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 hub.
In addition
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, the culture and tradition
also
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changes
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change
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 from town
center
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centre
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 to
other
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another
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.
This
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 is because our
country
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 is diverse in culture. I would like you to join
with
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apply
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me for 7
days
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7-day
 trip, which will cover almost every
city
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 in our
country
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 and
helps
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help
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 us to comprehend
about
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apply
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how major
city
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 outsource their business,
as well as
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 learn about he cultural heritage of our
country
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.
Furthermore
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, any open line of communication in
this
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 matter would be highly appreciated. Your sincerely, Harshidh panicker

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content
Plan your letter. Start with what you agree with, then say how your town is not the same, and end with a clear offer to show the town.
structure
Use short, clear sentences. Use links like first, also, and then to join ideas.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use 'Yours sincerely' and capital city names correctly.
paragraphing
Try to use one idea per paragraph. Put agreement, differences and the offer in separate blocks.
content
You state a clear goal and give a real next step to act.
content
You name some difference like place and culture, showing nation’s variety.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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