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The line graphs show wheat exports in Australia, Canada and European Community. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs show wheat exports in Australia, Canada and European Community. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates wheat exports by means of
millions
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 of
tonnes
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 across Australia, Canada and
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European
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the European
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Community
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in
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from
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 1985 to 1990.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that
,
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apply
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there
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their
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exporters
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exporters'
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 yearly
consumptions
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consumption
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were
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was
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 in a range of 15-19
millons
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million
of
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apply
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tonnes
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 in 1985.
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European
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The European
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Community
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 was the only consumer whose export figures rose during the period.
Firstly
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, in 1985,
Australia
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Australia's
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 export figures
was
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were
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 15
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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, next
year
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,
it
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they
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 slightly increased to 16 and steadily decreased to 13
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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 at
end
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the end
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 of the
year
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 1990.
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, Canada started from 19
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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 than fluctuated over the period and rose and peaked to 25
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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 in 1988 and decreased
next
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the next
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year
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 and plummeted to 14 and
flowed
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rose
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by
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to
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 18
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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 in 1990.
Secondly
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,
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European
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the European
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Community
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 started at 18
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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 and
following
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the following
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year
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 declined to 14 and remained at 15
millons
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million
level
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tonnes level
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 over the next two years,
then
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 rose to 21 million
of
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apply
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1990.
To sum up
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, the
European
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Community
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 was the only client
soared
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that soared
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 its export figures over the years.
Whereas
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,
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apply
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 Canada showed significant fluctuation and Australia
depict
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depicted
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 minor fluctuation
according to
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 the graph.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, tonnes, european, community, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • decline
  • rise
  • surpass
  • modest growth
  • significant
  • stability
  • comparisons
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