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Band 5

Your internet connection has been slow and intermittent Write a letter to your internet service provider to complain about. In the letter: – Describe the problem and why you are unhappy – Arrange for an engineer to visit your home – Request a reduction in your bill

Dear
Mr.
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Mr
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 Singh, I am writing
this
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 letter to bring your attention towards the
internet
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fact
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that
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is
Verb problem
the internet has
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 not
working
Verb problem
been working
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 properly for
a
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the
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last
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 month. I, Rupinder Kaur, live in Ajit Nagar in Bathinda, and I've
an
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 internet connection for a decade.
This
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 time, I am not
pleasant
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pleased
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 with the service. I am doing
work
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from
home
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work-from-home
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 job, and having a reliable internet connection is crucial for me. Nowadays, it disrupts my work because of poor and intermittent
connection
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connections
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. I am neither able to communicate with my colleagues nor
completing
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work
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the work
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 of my job. I am requesting you to hire an engineer to visit my home so he/she can fix the issue. It is my humble request to hire it as soon as possible. I cannot survive without it. Since I am not using the service, I am asking
you
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to
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for
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 a reduction in
a
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the
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 monthly bill as compensation for the period in which the service was not up to standard. I am looking forward to your positive consideration.
Your's
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 sincerely, Rupinder Kaur.

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structure
Plan one idea per paragraph. Start with the issue, then ask for the engineer, then ask for a cut in bill. Use one main idea in each paragraph.
language
Fix grammar and spelling. Use short, plain sentences. Change 'Your's sincerely' to 'Yours sincerely'.
content
Be clear on what you want and when. Say when you want the visit or a call to fix the issue.
tone
Keep a calm and polite tone. State you are not happy but still ask for help.
format
Add your contact info and sign in a neat way.
content
The letter states the problem and asks to send an engineer.
tone
The tone is polite and shows need for help.
structure
The letter covers the main points: problem, fix, and bill issue.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dissatisfaction
  • Intermittent
  • Impact
  • Urgency
  • Compensation
  • Resolution
  • Service provider
  • Inconvenience
  • Streamlining
  • Connectivity
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