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Band 2.5

more and more people are relying on the private car as their means of transportation. Describe some of the problems oreliance on cars can cause, and suggest at leats 1 possible solution.

Unfortunately, private cars have
many
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more
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 disadvantages than any other transport
becouse
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because
 they take up a lot of space in cities for roads and parking, leaving less room for homes, schools, hospitals and parks.
Also
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, cars cause bad air and loud noise, which can harm people's health and well-being
and
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 obviously rising use of private cars leads to traffic jams, longer travel times and wasted work hours. There are lots of possible
sollutions
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solutions
 that can help to remove these problems.
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, making public
transports
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transport
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 faster, cheaper and more reliable; building
more safe
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safer
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 bike lanes and walking paths; encouraging car sharing and remote work and using policy tools
likee
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 charges or limits to reduce car usage.
in
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 sum up, using all of
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this
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 shown solutions will improve people's lives, remove
traffics
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traffic
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 and air pollution. And the most important, it will make
possible
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it possible
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 to build more parks, hospitals, schools and any other important buildings.

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structure
Plan your writing with a clear order: short intro, 2 or 3 body parts, then a short close. Keep each idea in its own part.
content
Give at least one clear example to show how a solution works.
language
Use simple, correct grammar and spelling. Fix common errors like 'traffics' or 'solllutions'.
coherence
Use simple linking words to move from one idea to the next: First, Also, Then, So.
content
The essay talks about both the problems and the answers.
coherence
Some linking words show how ideas connect.
structure
The writing follows a flow from problem to solution to result.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • private car
  • traffic
  • long journeys
  • bad air
  • noise
  • health
  • city space
  • parking
  • homes
  • parks
  • shops
  • cost
  • fuel
  • insurance
  • maintenance
  • public transport
  • bus
  • train
  • cycle lane
  • bike
  • walk
  • car sharing
  • remote work
  • charges
  • policy
  • planning
  • inequality
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