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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the consumption of various fast foods ( pizza, fish and chips and hamburgers) by teenagers in Australia between the years 1975 and 2000.
Overall
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, we can see that the most consumed item was fish and chips,
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 the least were pizza and hamburgers.
Also
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, we can notice that the years with the highest eating rates were almost from 1982 to 2000.
According to
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 the data shown, fish and chips
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were
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 at
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their
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 top point at the beginning of the period with a
100
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100%
 eating percentage and
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were
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 adored by most of the individuals in that era, but unfortunately, it kept on decreasing to reach about
39
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39%
 in 2000. As for hamburgers and pizza, it is noticeable that both of them started with a low number and weren't that fancied and loved by teens, but both increased throughout the timeline and were introduced to (100 and 83), respectively.

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