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The graph shows the export of thousand of cars in Uzbekistan between 2014 and 2019.

The graph shows the export of thousand of cars in Uzbekistan between 2014 and 2019.
The graph provides information about the number of
cars
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export
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 in Uzbekistan from 2014 to 2018.
Overall
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, both
Type
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 A and
Type
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B
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cars
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 export experienced an upward trend with some fluctuations in certain years.
Firstly
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,
at
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in
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 the initial period, there were 200
cars
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 exported from Uzbekistan,
lower
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fewer
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 than
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the B
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B
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 model
cars
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.
Although
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 the global distribution of
type
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 A
cars
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 dropped 25 per cent in 2015, it continued to increase significantly
for
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by
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 almost 275
cars
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 in 2016.
However
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, the overseas shipment continued to drop in 2017 by 175 units.
Finally
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,
at the end
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 of the period, the exports reached 300 units.
Secondly
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,
Type
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B
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 models showed a consistent
exports
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export
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 trend in 2014 and 2015.
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 the shipments plummeted in 2016, the global sales of
type
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B
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cars
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 remained high and reached 325 units in 2018, 10 per cent higher than model A.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, type, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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