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The line graph shows the regional household recycling percentages in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.

The line graph shows the regional household recycling percentages in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.
The line graph illustrates the
residence's
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residents'
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 recycling percentages in the
UK
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,
France
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, and
Germany
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 from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
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,
waste
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 processing in the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 increased over the
period
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,
while
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France
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 experienced
downward
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a downward
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 trend with some
fluctiations
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fluctuations
.
To begin
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 with, only 20 per
cent
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 of
household
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households
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 in
Germany
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 recycled their
waste
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,
while
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 the
UK
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 recycled more than 35 per
cent
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 in 2005.
In
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From
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 2007 to 2009, recycled units in
Germany
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 increased
more
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by more
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 than 10 per
cent
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, and
it
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they
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 continued to grow by approximately 45 per
cent
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 in 2011.
On the other hand
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,
in
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from
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 2007 to
2009
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2009,
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 the recycled proportions in the
UK
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 remained stable
in
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at
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 40 per
cent
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 and began to increase
higher
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to more
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 than 50 per
cent
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 in 2011.
At the end
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 of the
period
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,
waste
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 processing in the
UK
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 achieved the highest level
to
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of
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 more than 60 per
cent
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 in a year, followed by
Germany
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by
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with
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 56 per
cent
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.
In contrast
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,
France
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 experienced
downward
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a downward
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 trend over the
period
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. In the first year, more than
a
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apply
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half
households
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of households
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 in
France
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,
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apply
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 recycled their
waste
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.
However
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, it began to
decreased
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decrease
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 over the 8 years by less than 30 per
cent
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 in 2013. Evidently, the proportions
was
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were
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 recovered
at the end
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 of the
period
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 by 40 per
cent
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, germany, waste, period, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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