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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, manya are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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 language learning is considered more important
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than local language learning in settings of many schools. If we continue to
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 foreign languages over our own, we risk losing our national identity. To my way of thinking, even though there might be certain threats associated with
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 vital for everyone to learn
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 risks, and
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 appropriate measures should be adopted to avoid them. As I have
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 at least the very basic
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 skills. Even if you are not intending to study or work abroad
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 or immigrate to an
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-speaking country, learning
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 language opens many doors to a bright future
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 its relevance.

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planning
Plan first. Write an intro, then 2 clear ideas, and a short end. Use one simple link word to move from one idea to the next.
content
Add more talk on how to keep local languages alive. Give steps or examples, even small ones.
grammar
Fix mistakes in grammar and spelling. Use plain, short sentences and common word forms.
content
The writer states a clear view on the topic.
argument
The idea of English helping future life is clear.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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