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Some people believe that the best way to solve environmental problems is to raise fuel and vehicles prices. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In recent years, the issue of
enviromental
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environmental
 problems has
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raised
 considerable discussion.
While
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 there are
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valid
 arguments supporting the stance that the best way to control
enviromental
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environmental
 problems is to raise
fuel
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 and
vehiles
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vehicle
 prices, I partly agree with
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 opinion.
This
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essay
 will
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discuss
 both sides
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briefly
 before presenting a well-grounded justification for my position. On one hand, some people may find merit in the argument that
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the high
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price
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 of
fuel
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 and
cars
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 would raise the quality of the
enviromrnt
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environment
 for various logical reasons. One of the primary
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explanations
 is that the higher
price
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 will reduce the time for using
cars
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, which stems from the belief that the cost will become a big pressure for a family, especially for those who live far from their workplace or have plenty of debts to
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. From
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 angle, the higher
price
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apperars
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appears
 to provide a
resonable
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reasonable
 rationale in
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 of the opposing view.
On the other hand
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, I strongly argue that the best way to solve
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 problem that
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has
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 been mentioned before is
chosing
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choosing
 clean
fules
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fuels
instead
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 of
fuel
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.
Firstly
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,
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a higher
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price
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 can't reduce the frequency of vehicle usage or buy new
cars
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 for those rich
family
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families
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.
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 becomes particularly relevant when
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considering
 the function of
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price
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prices
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 could not fundamentally solve
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 event,
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 with broader social or economic objectives.
Secondly
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, the
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 of cleaning
fuel
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 will not only
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affect
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 the
using
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use
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 of
cars
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 but
also
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 protect the
enviroment
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environment
.
Such
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 a perspective highlights the importance of using cleaning
fuel
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, as it not only mitigates existing challenges but
also
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 fosters
postive
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positive
 changes in protecting
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
. In conclusion,
lthough
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although
 the viewpoint that higher
price
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 of
fuel
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 and vehicles presents a seemingly logical rationale, I am of the firm conviction that the
cleaning
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fuel
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 is the best way to solve
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sitution
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situation
 is ultimately the most reasonable stance. By focusing on the fundamental
solvment
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solution
,
this
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approcah
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approach
 better
alighs
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aligns
 with
addersing
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addressing
 the root causes of
enviroment
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environmental
 pollution and achieving meaningful, sustainable outcomes in the long term.

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task response
Say your main point in the first line and keep to it in all your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make a clear plan in the essay: first a short intro, one idea in each paragraph, and a short end.
coherence and cohesion
Use small link words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'however' to join ideas.
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Check spelling and word use. For example, write 'environment' not 'enviroment' and 'vehicles' not 'vehiles'. Keep to simple words.
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The writer tries to cover both sides of the issue.
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The end shows a clear view.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • air pollution
  • alternative energy sources
  • electric vehicles
  • renewable energy
  • public transport
  • urban transport systems
  • economically disadvantaged communities
  • social inequality
  • operational costs
  • goods and services
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