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The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Barchart and pie chart below show
results
Correct article usage
the results
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 of self-exercise objectives and places for
aged people
Correct word order
people aged
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from
Change preposition
apply
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20 to 50.
Overall
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, answers
at the end
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 of
tests
Correct article usage
the tests
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 were different.
While
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 most people trained in recreation, only
small
Correct article usage
a small
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 percentage of them preferred public places. As the bar chart shows, 40% of all people had recreation courses,
while
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 weight loss and mood improvement had almost the same results (10%). Disease prevention had approximately 15, and muscle toning had just 10 more than disease prevention. As the pie chart illustrates, 35% of all inhabitants attended gym classes,
while
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other
Correct article usage
the other
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 20% trained in parks. Public sport venues, playgrounds and other public areas had
by
Verb problem
increased by
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 15% in each of them.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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