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The diagram below show changes that have taken palde in the Sawry district neighbourhood sinde 1920

The diagram below show changes that have taken palde in the Sawry district neighbourhood sinde 1920
The given charts demonstrate the modifications of the Sawry District
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 over a century. One striking
features
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feature
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 is that
,
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apply
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 the area has become more urbanised and residential. The
amount
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number
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 of buildings has risen than initial
period
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. First of all, in the
west bottom
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southwest
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 of the map, Miller’s Lake
has
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had
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 the same
during
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level during
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 the given
period
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,
while
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 Prestwich Primary School was demolished to make way for Lonoco Petrol Station.
Moreover
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, in the
initual
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initial
Use synonyms
period
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period,
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 the south part of the graph
there were
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showed
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 six trees, but in
2020
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2020,
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 half of the trees were removed to
give
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make
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the
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apply
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way for a bigger Primary school. The opposite
way
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side
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 of the Primary school, two apartments, one more shop and
house
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a house
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was
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were
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 erected.
Secondly
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,
in
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at
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 the top of
the
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apply
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Oak Avenue, Tulebug Bros. Cannery was
knock
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knocked
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 down for the Yang Office Complex.
Furthmore
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Furthermore
,
bridge
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a bridge
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 was constructed on the Elmwood River.
In addition
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,
beach
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the beach
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 was replaced by the bike path. In the preliminary
Use synonyms
period
Add a comma
period,
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 there were four houses
,
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;
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however
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however,
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 two of them
was
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were
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 dismantled,
one
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and one
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 of them was put down for
new
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a new
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 apartment.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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