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inSome companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. What are the advantages for a company of having a uniform? Are there any benefits of having a uniform for the staff?

Firstly
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, some companies offer
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 boring and ugly uniforms.
As a result
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, some people working there will dislike going to their jobs. Imagine wearing the same outfit every day. Personally, would never wear the same uniform every day, considering you'll be there for a long time.
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, the Company may lose some of their
staff
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,
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Furthermore
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, managers could see a significant decrease in their
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 working.
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, some
staff
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 may come to work depressed,
unhyped
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, and sometimes sleepy.
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, there are some benefits of a uniform. It could look like the company is well-known or respected.
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, it may seem like the ceo is in control of everything. To summarise, the Company should not force its
staff
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 to wear a uniform

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improvement
Add a short start that says what you think. End with a line that repeats your view. Give 2 or 3 good points for and 2 or 3 for.
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Make one idea in each part. Put ideas in two or three small parts. Use linking words like also, but, and, so.
style
Use simple and clear words. Check long sentences and fix them.
content
You talk about both sides of the topic.
structure
First and Second are used to show order.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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